作为考研英语备考的核心模块，2019年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文，紧扣考研英语二写作技巧常见话题，由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改，详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点，是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。

一、2019年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2019年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2019年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the future of graduates at a certain university from 2013 to 2018. In 2013, the percentage of going to work was 68.1%, but by 2018, this rate had gradually decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of continue studying experienced a significant increase of 7.7% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of being a boss ramained stable and steady.

The corn reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous efforts to build a sound education system, enabling university students to have ample opportunities for further education. In addition; an increasing number of young people believe that in modern soclety full of changes, challenges ,and choices, improving their education level is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trend.?I am confident that the proportion of continue studying will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of going to work will likely continue decrease and the proportion of being a boss will remain relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：future of graduates

批改：改为 different choices of graduates 更清晰

原文：going to work

批改：是选择就业的学生的比例，不是 就业的比例，改为 graduates who chose employment

原文：continue studying

批改：改为 those who chose to pursue further education

原文：being a boss

批改：改为 those who chose to start their own businesses

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容，但是表达也更精准一点，此处都是 有不同选择的毕业生 的比例

批改：语法正确

原文： goverment

批改：government

批改：语法正确

原文：;

批改：此处为逗号

原文：,

批改：删去

批改：内容表达不错，也很具体，但是不能只分析为何升学人数呈上升趋势，就业人数下降的原因 也要进行分析

批改：删去

原文：continue studying

批改：改为 those who choose to pursue further education (此处 choose 用一般现在时)

原文：going to work

批改：改为 graduates who choose employment

原文：continue

批改：continue to do sth, 改为 continue to

原文：being a boss

批改：改为 those who choose to start their own businesses

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体, 但是中间段 就业人数下降的原因 也要进行分析

修改建议：1. 语法和内容表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心 3. 标点使用要规范，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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