据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2013年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

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Without the drawing above, an though-provoking

phenomenon would be overlooked: When the undergradua

tes facing graduation, they can’t distinctionly know

the orizentation of future. In this sence, the graduator

do not know how to chose the road of future, Seeking

works, taking part in postgraduate exams, going aboard

or creacting work. At the botton of the picture, there

Is a eye-catching sentence: Select

Common as it is at first glance, this picture

is filled with profound insights upon closer reflection:

The colleage are supposed to clearly make plan for

future during the university study, To began with,

the undergraduates should carefully in curriculum,

learning more theroy knowledge, obtainning more

professional skill in practice. Furthermore, This

phenomenon is particularly worth concerning for the

reason that certain universities pay more attention to

student"s academic pursuit, ignoring the significance

of occupational planning, the undergraduate must

through extensive reading, hand-on practice, and

disciplined training

All in all, only by doing this. It can be

said with certainty that we will not anxious when

select the road of life

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Without the drawing above, an though-provoking phenomenon would be overlooked:

批改：Without the drawing above, an though-provoking phenomenon would be overlooked:：① 冠词错误，though-provoking 以辅音音素开头，应使用 a。② 拼写错误，though-provoking 应为 thought-provoking。

原文：they can’t distinctionly know the orizentation of future

批改：...they can’t distinctionly know the orizentation of future.：① distinctionly 是拼写错误，且无此词，想表达的可能是 distinctly（清晰地）。② orizentation 拼写错误，应为 orientation。③ of future 前缺少定冠词，应为 of the future。

原文：facin

批改：从句中使用动词，face

原文：n this sence, the graduator do not know how to chose the road of future, Seeking works, taking part in postgraduate exams, going aboard or creacting work.

批改：In this sence, the graduator do not know how to chose the road of future, Seeking works, taking part in postgraduate exams, going aboard or creacting work.：① sence 拼写错误，应为 sense。② graduator 应为 graduates。③ do 主谓不一致，主语 graduates 是复数，但 the graduator 是单数，逻辑混乱。④ chose 是动词 choose 的过去式，此处应使用原形 choose。⑤ Seeking works 搭配不当，应为 Seeking jobs 或 Finding employment。⑥ going aboard 拼写错误，aboard 意为“在船/车上”，应改为 going abroad（出国）。⑦ creacting work 拼写错误，应为 creating work（创业），但更地道的说法是 starting their own business 或 entrepreneurship。

原文：At the botton of the picture, there Is a eye-catching sentence: Select

批改：At the botton of the picture, there Is a eye-catching sentence: Select：① botton 拼写错误，应为 bottom。② Is 首字母不应大写。③ a eye-catching 冠词错误，eye 以元音音素开头，应使用 an。

原文： colleage are supposed to clearly make plan for future during the university study,

批改：The colleage are supposed to clearly make plan for future during the university study,：① colleage 拼写错误，应为 colleges（学院）或 students（学生），根据上下文，此处指代不清。② make plan 应为 make a plan 或 make plans。

原文：o began with, the undergraduates should carefully in curriculum, learning more theroy knowledge, obtainning more professional skill in practice.

批改：此句没有谓语动词。should carefully in curriculum 不成立。theroy 拼写错误，应为 theoretical。obtainning 拼写错误，应为 obtaining。

原文：This phenomenon is particularly worth concerning for the reason that certain universities pay more attention to student"s academic pursuit, ignoring the significance of occupational planning,

批改：① This 首字母不应大写。② worth concerning 应为 worth concerning itself 或 worth attention。③ student"s 应为复数所有格 students"。④ 逗号粘连错误，前后是两个完整句子。

原文：e must through extensive reading, hand-on practice, and disciplined training

批改：此句缺少谓语动词。must 是情态动词，后必须接动词原形，through 是介词。应改为 must go through... 或 must engage in...。hand-on 拼写错误，应为 hands-on。

原文：ce:

批改：本段意图描述图画并揭示现象，但充满了各种拼写、用词和语法错误，导致表达混乱，意思难以理解。虽然大致勾勒出了毕业生面临多种选择的核心内容，但语言质量差，影响了沟通效果。

原文： trai

批改：本段试图阐释寓意并提出评论，逻辑框架尚可。但语言问题较为严重，出现了多个导致句子无法成立的错误（句子片段、缺少谓语）

原文：is. It can be said with certainty that we will not anxious when select the road of li

批改：① 句号误用导致句子片段，All in all, only by doing this 不是一个完整的句子。② will not anxious 结构错误，will 后不能直接接形容词，应改为 will not be anxious。③ when select 动词形式错误，连词 when 后应接从句（主语+谓语），或接动名词 selecting。

原文：e

批改：本段结尾意图总结全文，但同样因基础语法错误而表意不清

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：6/20分

总评：

这篇文章在语言质量上存在问题。存在基础的错误，包括但不限于：拼写错误、频繁的用词错误、多个句子因缺少谓语动词而无法成立、主谓不一致、以及标点误用。这些错误共同导致文章词不达意，理解困难，阻碍了思想的表达。即使这些问题可能是扫描问题导致的，但是如果不自己先好好检查一下这些小问题，老师无法对你的作文真实水平做出判断，那对你作文的打分也会影响到你的改进方向，所以以后提交之前可以先检查一下，看看没有基础错误以后，再提交。

范文参考

As is vividly depicted in the drawing, a multitude of graduates stand at a crossroads, overwhelmed and perplexed by the numerous paths stretching before them. These paths represent diverse life choices such as seeking employment, pursuing further studies, studying abroad, or starting their own business. The most striking feature is the caption at the bottom: "Choice," which highlights the core dilemma facing today"s youth.

This thought-provoking illustration serves as a metaphor for the anxiety and confusion many graduates experience when navigating their future. The underlying message is clear: a lack of clear career planning during one"s university years can lead to paralysis at the moment of decision. Therefore, it is imperative for students to engage in self-exploration and practical skill-building early on. Simultaneously, universities should bear a share of the responsibility by integrating comprehensive career guidance services into the curriculum, rather than focusing solely on academic achievement.

In conclusion, making a wise life choice requires proactive preparation from both individuals and educational institutions. Only through early planning and systematic support can graduates transform the anxiety of choice into the confidence to embark on a fulfilling life path.

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。