当你坐在考研英语二考场，面对2014年大作文题目的那一瞬间，是否能快速组织起一篇结构清晰、表达地道的高分文章？本文这篇批改例文，正是考研英语二真题话题下的标准范本，适合每一位考研英语备考生反复研读。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of urban and rural populations in China over a period of 20 years. In 1990, the number of urban population was approximately 300 million, but by 2010, this figure had gradually rise to 666 million. In contrast, the number of rural population experienced a slow decline of about 160 million during the same period.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor of chestroting the spmphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system in cites, enabling rural residents to have ample opportunities to find jobs in urban areas. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society ,rural residents are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also purse a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of them choose to live in cities. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of rural population is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily decrease in the following decades. In contrast, the number of urban population will likely continue to increase.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： this figure had g

批改：语法错误：过去完成时的结构是 had + 过去分词。rise 的过去分词是 risen

原文：perienced a slow

批改：用词不当：在二十年里减少1.6亿人口，这不应被描述为“缓慢的” (slow)，而是一个 significant（显著的）或 marked（明显的）下降。

原文：e bar chart clearly depicts the changes of urban and rural populations in China over a period of 20 years. In 1990, the number of urban population was approximately 300 million, but by 2010, this figure had gradually rise to 666 million. In contrast, the number of rural population experienced a slow decline of about 160 million during the same period.

批改：本段准确地捕捉了数据变化的趋势和幅度，非常好。问题在于语法细节和用词的精确度。通过使用更地道的表达和更准确的形容词

原文：the conductor of chestrotin

批改：严重拼写错误与表达不当：chestroting the spmphony 是难以理解的拼写错误，推测应为 orchestrating the symphony（ orchestrate 指挥，symphony 交响乐）。

原文：n cites, enabling

批改：拼写错误：cites 应为 cities；purse（名词：钱包）应为 pursue（动词：追求）。

原文： core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor of chestroting the spmphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system in cites, enabling rural residents to have ample opportunities to find jobs in urban areas. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society ,rural residents are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also purse a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of them choose to live in cities. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：本段的论证角度选择得非常出色，直指问题的核心。但非常可惜，密集的拼写错误

原文：e number of rural population is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily decrease in the following d

批改：逻辑偏差：将“乡村人口减少”直接等同于“社会进步的清晰标志”，这一价值判断是片面且有失严谨的。城市化是社会发展的一个方面，但乡村人口的急剧减少也伴随着空心化、老龄化等社会问题。结论应保持客观中立，避免此类绝对化的断言。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分

总体修改建议

治拼写错误：请将 orchestrating, cities, pursue, risen 等词牢牢掌握。写作后务必留出时间专门检查拼写。

严谨得出结论：结论应基于数据，避免做出片面或绝对化的价值判断。使用 it is likely that...（很可能...）等谨慎的措辞。

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