一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2017年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon，there is younger,He is said that he has a lot of books and lie on the chair.On the contrary,in the right-hand portrayal,There is younger too,the younger want to finish reading 20 books.Evidnently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that action and practice is the brush that paints a bright future, while lazy is the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in serveral ways,but two of them are particulary significant.First and foremost,Sloth not only hinders one’s success,but also acts as an achilles’heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.What is more,In modern society full of changes,chances,and challenges,perseverance has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people,and its siginificance has become increasingly evident.

In brief,persist in reading and learning is the catalyst for societal and personal development,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore,we should actively support and advocate this practice should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture;additionally,we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of lazy to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：younger

批改：younger是young的比较级，不是年轻人的意思 改为 a young man

原文：He is said

批改：不用大写，be+过去分词表示“被动” he claims/says that..

原文：lie

批改：lies，与has并列，保持时态一致

原文：Evidnently

批改：Evidently

原文：is

批改：are

原文： lazy

批改：laziness

原文： younger too,the younger want

批改：同上 wants主谓一致

原文：perseverance

批改：与文章题目有些脱离，应该是“付诸行动”taking practical action而不是“检测”

原文：persist

批改：persisting

原文：should

批改：and

原文：azy

批改：laziness

原文：persist in reading and learning

批改：其实有点偏题了。这个题目主旨应该是“脚踏实地地阅读”“付诸行动而不是表面功夫”等，不是“坚持阅读”

原文：n the left-hand cartoon，there is younger,He is said that he has a lot of books and lie on the chair.On the contrary,in the right-hand portrayal,There is younger too,the younger want to finish reading 20 books.Evidnently,the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that action and practice is the brush that paints a bright future, while lazy is the shackle that hinders progress.

批改：围绕 “有书不读 vs 读书践行” 的漫画主题展开

原文： phenomenon is thought-provoking in serveral ways,but two of them are particulary significant.First and foremost,Sloth not only hinders one’s success,but also acts as an achilles’heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.What is more,In modern society full of changes,chances,and challenges,perseverance has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people,and its siginificance has become increasingly evident. In brief,persist in reading and learning is the catalyst for societal and personal development,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore,we should actively support and advocate this practice should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture;additionally,we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of lazy to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：论证角度有些偏离主题，将 “读书践行” 泛化为 “懒惰与坚持”

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：5/20

1.题目要求：字数符合题目要求。文章需要分析图画并表明观点，符合题目要求。但是论证的时候偏离了题目要求。

2.语言表达：语言表达清晰，但存在较多语法错误和拼写错误，考生需注意。

3.内容层面：论证内容偏离了题目要求，聊到了“懒惰和坚持”。

4.修改意见：文章整体较完整，结构较为清晰，按照描述漫画、阐述哲理和提出呼吁的顺序进行写作。然而存在较多语法错误和拼写错误，如名词词性的转化、单复数等基本语法，考生需多加注意。另外开头的总结也是贴近了主题practice，但是后面的内容没有讲到实践，而是讲到了“懒惰和坚持”，这不符合题目要求。考生在动笔前最好打个草稿，将自己的想法写下来，时刻观察内容和思路是否与题目有偏离。

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