据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2011年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of markets share of certain brands in market of domestic cars from 2008 to 2009.In 2008,the percentage of domestic brands was approximately 25%,but by 2009,this rate had substantially risen to around 33%.By the contrary,the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a significant decrease of about 10% during the same period.Simultaneously,the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To starts with,as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes,our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace,allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items.In addition,against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development,the younger generation,particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s,are accustomed to using domestic brands cars and have become the primary consumer group.Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends?I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands cars will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast,the percentage of Japanese and American brands will likely continue to decline.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：markets share

批改：此处为 market shares

原文：market of domestic cars

批改：改为 the domestic car market 更合适

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

原文：starts

批改：此处为 start

批改：语法正确，内容表达也很好

原文：brands cars

批改：brands 和 cars 保留一个词即可

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文：By the contrary

批改：注意固定搭配，常见的表达为 On the contrary

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

原文：brands

批改：删去，或者改为单数 brand

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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