考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2011年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二真题话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the perentage of the car that made in China was 25%,but by 2009, the rate had gradually risen to 32%。I contrast,the percentage of the car made in Japan experienced a significant decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously the percentage of the car made in American remained stuble and steady。

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summanized as follows。 To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation,particularly those born in the 1980s and 1990s,are acustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primlary consumer group. In addibion, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation.In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the signiticant -progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of the car made in China (is a cleay sign of social improvement and) will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast, the proportion of the car made in other countries will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：perentage

批改：percentage

原文：I

批改：In

原文：。

批改：英文句号

原文：car that

批改：cars that are后者car made in China

原文：car

批改：cars

原文：car

批改：cars

原文：stuble

批改：stable

原文：。

批改：英文句号，注意拼写和语法错误

原文：。

批改：用英文句号

原文：summanized

批改：summarized

原文：acustomed

批改：accustomed

原文：primlary

批改：primary

原文：addibion

批改：addition

原文：signiticant -progress

批改：significant progress

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summanized as follows。 To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation,particularly those born in the 1980s and 1990s,are acustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primlary consumer group. In addibion, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation.In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the signiticant -progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：信息很全面，注意拼写和标点

原文：car

批改：cars

原文：cleay

批改：clearly

原文： car

批改：cars

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of the car made in China (is a cleay sign of social improvement and) will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast, the proportion of the car made in other countries will likely continue to decrease.

批改：总结趋势，呼应主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，但是拼写、标点和单复数错误太多了，是扣分的主要原因；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，同位语成分，介词短语，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行文流畅，内容连贯；

4. 建议：要深刻吃透老师的模板，使用自己的语言，灵活运用在各类题目中，进一步丰富自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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