本文整理了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语写作冲刺的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

以下是修改后的完整文字：

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of some brands of cars in the Chinese market. In 2005, the percentage of Chinese brands was 25, but by 2009, the percentage had substantially risen to 32. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a significant decline of 10 percentage points. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the people, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed as luxury cars. In addition, against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are acquainted with using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brands will steadily increase. In contrast, the proportion of other countries’ brands will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：25

批改：此处为百分数，要写准确，改为 25%

原文：32

批改：32%

原文：10 percentage points

批改：改为 10%

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容， 注意数字的表达要准确

批改：语法正确

原文：the

批改：删去

原文：cars

批改：此处表示的是 奢侈品，改为 items

批改：内容表达不错，也比较具体

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的，数字的表达一定要准确

语言表达：存在几处细节表达问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 细节表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心 2. 数字的表达要准确，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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