本文将启航教育一对一批改过的2019年考研英语二高分范文进行公开呈现。批改老师对文中每一个失分细节进行了精确标注，对照考研英语写作模板热点话题与评分细则，你可以快速了解考研英语写作的提分方向。

一、2019年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2019年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2019年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the employment destinations of undergraduate graduates from a certain university in2013 and 2018. In 2013, the percentage of taking up an occupation was 68.1%, but by 2018, the rate had gradually decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of going on educating experienced a significant increase of 7.7% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of starting a business remained stable and stead.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes "On life"s stage, pressure is always present" Nowadays, the university students are compelled to confront immense economic pressure, and as a result, taking up an occupation is emerged as their significant choice. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the percentage of going on educating will steadily increase in the following decades. The percentage of taking up an occupation will continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：e bar chart clearly depicts the employment destinations of undergraduate graduates from a certain university in2013 and 2018. In 2013, the percentage of taking up an occupation was 68.1%, but by 2018, the rate had gradually decreased to 60.7%. In contrast, the proportion of going on educating experienced a significant increase of 7.7% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of starting a business remained stable and stead.

批改：本段很好地完成了数据描述的任务，要点齐全，对比清晰

原文： core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes "On life"s stage, pressure is always present" Nowadays, the university students are compelled to confront immense economic pressure, and as a result, taking up an occupation is emerged as their significant choice. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：你尝试从经济压力和消费群体变化的角度分析原因，这个思路很好。引用的句子也增添了文采

原文：t about future trends? I am confident that the percentage of going on educating will steadily increase in the following decades. The percentage of taking up an occupation will continue to decrease.

批改：结尾段对未来趋势做出了预测，这符合图表作文的常见写法

原文：ained stable and

批改：“remained stable and stead” 中，“stead” 是 “steady” 的笔误。同时，创业的比例从1.3%升至2.6，是翻倍（doubled）而非完全稳定，用 “saw a modest increase” 或 “doubled” 会更准确。

原文： is emerged

批改：“is emerged” 是不正确的结构，应改为 “has emerged”；“in the1990s” 应为 “in the 1990s”。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11

你的作文完成了主要的任务，结构清晰。在词汇的准确运用和论述逻辑的严密性上还有提升空间。

总评与建议：

同学，你这篇作文最让老师欣赏的是你清晰的段落意识和尝试使用复杂句式与词汇的勇气，比如“compelled to confront”、“against the backdrop of”等，这都是写作中的亮点。

当前，我们可以集中精力提升论述的精准度与逻辑性。你的想法很好，但需要确保论据能直接支撑图表所展现的趋势。我的核心建议是：

确保因果对应：在分析原因时，时刻对照数据趋势。例如，本图趋势是“深造上升，就业下降”，那么原因分析应着重于“为何更多人选择深造而非直接就业”（如：提升竞争力以应对就业市场压力）。

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