启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2017年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

These are two simple but enlightoning cartons. In the left drawing, a man lie in a chair, arrgant saying "I have a body of books." By contrast, the man in right drawing is satting in front of table, saying " I struggle to read 20 books in this year." Sereval Chinese characters can be noticed, which say "have books" and "read books".

what these two cartoon intend to highlight is the actions is better than only words. From individual perspective, putting goals into actions is the key of academic and career success. The reverse is also ture, those who only set a goal but make no effort toward it allways do nothing. The case is the same for companies and nations. A merchant or a minister requires in the process of successful development is a person who allways takes concrete actions, rather than a person who only saying but never do something.

To sum up, it can be seen that the importance of action is obvious. As a result, when we think about doing something, the most important is how you do it.,not how you say it.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：enlightoning

批改：enlightening

原文：cartons

批改：cartoons

原文：lie

批改：单三lies

原文：arrgant

批改：arrogantly

原文：satting

批改：sitting

原文：Sereval

批改：several

原文：These are two simple but enlightoning cartons. In the left drawing, a man lie in a chair, arrgant saying "I have a body of books." By contrast, the man in right drawing is satting in front of table, saying " I struggle to read 20 books in this year." Sereval Chinese characters can be noticed, which say "have books" and "read books".

批改：能够完整描述出图画中的内容，语言连贯，注意避免小的语言问题。

原文：what

批改：首字母大写

原文：cartoon

批改：复数

原文：is

批改：改成are，主谓一致

原文：of

批改：改成to，the key to固定搭配

原文：allways

批改：always

原文：A merchant or a minister requires in the process of successful development is a person who allways takes concrete actions, rather than a person who only saying but never do something.

批改：这句话有两个谓语，改成what引导的主语从句：What a merchant or a minister needs in their process of successful development is someone who always takes concrete actions, rather than someone who only says things but never does anything.还有注意主谓一致问题

原文：To sum up, it can be seen that the importance of action is obvious. As a result, when we think about doing something, the most important is how you do it.,not how you say it.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误以及名词单复数的正确；句式和语法方面，注意主谓一致问题以及一句话只能有一个谓语。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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