对于考研英语一而言，2021年大作文常以图画形式呈现。本文精解的这篇图画批改范例，启航教育老师逐句解读图画细节、寓意提炼与评论展开三步走，是考研英语作文万能句型图画作文的经典教学样本。

一、2021年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2021年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and 2)give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2021年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly displays the percentage of the choice of take exercise resident in certain city.doing exercise by themself take the lead at 54.3%,followed by doing exercise with friend at 47.7%.additionally,doing exercise with their family and group are also considered,accounting for 23.9%,and 15.8%.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound exercise system and facilities ,enabling people to have ample opportunities to doing exercise.In addition,as we all know,the outbreak of the Covid-19 has significantly effecting every aspects of our lives,and altering people’s choices and behaviors.consequently,an increasing number of individuals starting to pay more attention to health,this can explain why people doing exercise by themself.

What about the trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choice of people ,and will likely remain stable and steady in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： take

批改：介词 "of" 后面应接名词或动名词，应为 taking​ exercise

原文： choice

批改：变复数，改为 choices

原文：resident

批改：变复数，改为 residents

原文：in certain city.

批改：缺少冠词，改为 in a certain city.

原文： themself

批改：复数概念，改为 themselves。

原文：take

批改：动名词短语做主语，谓语动词用单数，改为 takes

原文：friend

批改：复数 friends。

原文：a

批改：大写，检查下文同样大小写问题

原文： group

批改：后面加个 activities ，改为 group activities 语意更完整

原文： to doing exercise.

批改：to do 表目的， to doing exercise语法结构错误，直接删除 doing 即可

原文：effecting

批改：​ 现在完成时态 "has" 后面应接过去分词。应为impacted

原文： aspects

批改：every 后面接单数名词 aspect。

原文：and

批改：删除and ，altering 做伴随状语，表示带来的影响

原文： starting

批改：句子缺少谓语动词，用现在完成时 改为 have started

原文：,t

批改：句号大写

原文： choice

批改：改为 choices

原文：themself.

批改：themselves

原文：doing

批改：删除doing ,exercise 变成谓语动词

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9 /15

从结构层面看，本文脉络清晰，采用三段式写作，开头清楚表明图片，中间进行了分析，最后做出了总结；

从内容层面看，有一个很大的问题是字数太少，不符合题目要求，内容上独自锻炼占比 54.3%，原因分析太浮于表面。

从语言层面看，基础语法错误太多：可数名词变复数、冠词、主谓一致、句子成分、to do 表目的。

建议：检查表弟符号大小写，仿写范文，进一步熟悉语法细节，加油吧！

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