启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的考研英语作文模板高分范文。本文呈现的2016年考研英语二大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of different purposes of students’ traveling at an university. Enjoying the scenery takes the lead at a 37%, followed by relieving stress at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making friends, cultivating independence and other factors are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6%, 15% respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the saying goes, “On life’s stage, pressure is always present.” Nowadys, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, travelling has emerged as their significant choice for relieving stress. In addition, against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly university students, are accustomed to relieving stress through travelling. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

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批改：删掉

原文：isplays the percentage breakdown of different purposes of students’ traveling at an university. Enjoying the scenery takes the lead at a 37%, followed by relieving stress at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making friends, cultivating independence and other factors are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6%, 15% respectively.

批改：第一段描述饼状图数据清晰，内容准确，句子写的比较地道通顺，与范文较为相似，考生可试着 改写句子，或者几篇范文句子杂糅起来写。现阶段以提升自己写作水平为主。

原文：owad

批改：Nowadays,

原文：, “On life’s stage, pressure is always present.” Nowadys, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, travelling has emerged as their significant choice for relieving stress. In addition, against the backdrop of our country’s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly university students, are accustomed to relieving stress through travelling. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising

批改：第二段原因分析比较准确，内容丰富详实，语法和词汇没有大的问题，整体读感和观感比较好。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10/15

语法：语法上没有什么大的问题，整体比较顺畅。

词汇：拼错的单词还是有的，要细心哦。

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的，读起来比较顺畅。

内容：三段结构可以的，字数和内容分配的很均衡，第二段分点写很有逻辑性。内容整体还是可以的，第二段范文句子和自己写的句子杂糅，使之成为自己的文章，这个悟性还是可以的。第一段可以试着改写一下句子哦。

未来可期，继续加油吧。

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