启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2024年考研英语二大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、2024年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2024年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the percentage breakdown of the main achievement of students in the labor practical lessons at a certain university. The students who learned relectant knowledge takes the lead at 91.3%, followed by who enhanced the ability of handle at 84.8%. Additionally, factors such as making mood well and improving the ability of cooperation.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, knowledge is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, learning hard has emerged as their significant choice. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the doices of students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：relectant

批改：relevant

原文：ability of handle

批改：建议动手能力改为 hands-on skills

原文：factors such as making mood well and improving the ability of cooperation

批改：补充谓语 are also considered, accounting for...

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the percentage breakdown of the main achievement of students in the labor practical lessons at a certain university. The students who learned relectant knowledge takes the lead at 91.3%, followed by who enhanced the ability of handle at 84.8%. Additionally, factors such as making mood well and improving the ability of cooperation.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象。

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, an increasing number of young people believe that in modern society full of changes, challenges, and chances, knowledge is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, learning hard has emerged as their significant choice. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：doices

批改：choices

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the doices of students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

语法：本次作文中出现单词拼写错误等问题，会很拉低你的平均分。另外还需要注意一些基础的语法问题和表达搭配问题，有时间好好看看文中的批改，细心吸收，争取在接下来的练习中避免类似的错误。

内容：从图表中可以看出，知识和动手能力提升显著，说明课程注重实践与理论结合；合作能力提升比例较低，可能与课程设计或学生参与度有关。结合现实意义：劳动实践课有助于学生将理论应用于实际，提升综合能力，同时对心理健康有积极影响。最后可提出建议，课程可增加团队合作项目，进一步提升学生协作能力，同时保持课程的趣味性和实用性。

整体来看，主要是细节错误，但要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班的六大亮点——锦囊妙句、写作模板、主讲亲批、AI智能批改、配套图书与社群伴学——覆盖启航考研英语冲刺所需。报名即可享受考研英语全程写作辅导，详情请在线咨询。