启航教育在考研英语写作教学中反复强调：词汇与句式的高级化是考研英语作文高分的关键。本文整理的2015年考研英语二批改范例，几乎每一段都包含高分替换词与衔接词，是考研英语二写作技巧写作锦囊中的代表性范文。

一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of consumption of China"s certain city during spring vacation.The new year"s gifts takes a lead at 40%. Additionally, factors such as transportation, eating together and others account for 20%,20% and 20%, respectively.

The core reasons for the obviously phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To starts with, as the saying goes,"" On life"s stage, pressure is always present"". Nowadays, an increasing number of people are compelled to confront immerse work pressure, and as a result, eating together and giving gifts has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing new year vacation.

In addition, aganist the backdrop of our country"s dynamic and rapid development, the younger generation, particularly those born in 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using gifts for express happy new year"s emotion and have becomed a primary group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurpring.

What about the future trends?I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully refelect the choice of younger, serveing as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：consumption of China"s certain city

批改：此处描述的是 居民 的花费，改为 different expenses among residents in a certain city in China

原文：spring vacation

批改：改为 the Spring Festival 更精确

原文：The new year"s gifts

批改：改为 New Year gifts

原文： takes

批改：主语是复数，此处不用三单形式，改为 take

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

原文：obviously

批改：形容词修饰名词，改为 obvious

原文：starts

批改：固定搭配，此处为 start

原文：has

批改：主语是两件事 "Eating together and giving gifts"，由 "and" 连接，构成复数主语，因此谓语动词应该用复数形式 have

原文：choice

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 choices

原文：new year vacation

批改：更常见的说法是 the New Year"s vacation 或 the New Year holiday

原文：unsurpring

批改：unsurprising

批改：内容表达不错，但是此处要和上一段一起写为第二段，作为主体段

原文：younger

批改：改为 residents 更符合题目

批改：结尾段内容表达不错

原文：for express

批改：for 是介词，后面要加 doing 形式，改为 for expressing

原文：happy new year"s emotion

批改：改为 New Year"s greetings

原文： becomed

批改：become 的过去分词是 become

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：内容比较丰富具体，结构上建议写为三段式，中间两段合为一段

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心 3.结构上建议写为三段式，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，加油！

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