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一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts during 2008 and 2009, the maketof the domestic car brands . In 2008，the number of China brands, was 25%, but 2009, the figure had decreased to 33%. In contrast,the number of Japanese brands from 35% decline to 25% during the same time. Simultaneously, the number of American brands, remaining stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follw. To start with, againsting the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation,are accustomed to using domestie cars and have become the primary consumer group,more demands, more domestic brands.In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation.In my view , the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about the future trends? I am confident that the number of domestic car brands. will steadily more in the following decades. In contrast, the number of Japanese brands will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the maket

批改：注意拼写，且此处表达的应该是 市场份额的变化，改为 the changes of market shares

原文： number

批改：改为 proportion 更精确

原文： 2009

批改：改为 by 2009

原文：decreased

批改：25% 到 33% 是增长，改为 increased

原文：number

批改：改为 proportion 更精确

原文： from 35% decline

批改：此处要先写动词，改为 declined from 35%

原文：number

批改：改为 proportion 更精确

原文：remaining

批改：此处为谓语动词，改为 remained, remaining 是非谓语动词

原文：,

批改：删去

原文：,

批改：删去

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容，但是要多注意语法问题

原文： as follw

批改：改为 as follows ，固定搭配

原文：againsting

批改：此处为介词 against

原文：domestie

批改：domestic

原文：,more demands, more domestic brands

批改：删去，此处表达很突兀

批改：语法正确，表达也不错

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文：number

批改：改为 proportion 更精确

批改：删去

原文：more

批改：此处为动词，改为 increase

原文：number

批改：改为 proportion 更精确

批改：结尾段表达不错

原文：China brands

批改：Chinese brands 是更常见、更地道的表达。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在一些语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心 3. 标点使用要规范。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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