思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向，本文呈现的2014年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面，逐段展示了一篇考研英语写作冲刺高分范文的诞生过程。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of urban and rural population in China during 20 years. In 1990, the population of urban areas was approximately 300 million, but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to 666 million. In contrast, the population of rural areas experienced a slow decrease about 160 million during the same period.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor of orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system in cities, enabling rural residents to have ample opportunities to find jobs in cities. In addition, in the wake of high-speed advancement of society, rural residents are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of them choose to live in city. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban population will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast the figure of rural population will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：of

批改：改为 in, 表示“在...方面发生的变化”

原文： population

批改：此处强调两个群体，改为 populations

原文：population of urban areas

批改：直接写为 urban population 更简洁

原文： population of rural areas

批改：可改为 rural population

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，内容表达也很好

批改：语法正确

原文：city

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 cities

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文：contrast

批改：加逗号

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

原文：figure

批改：改为 number

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法表达问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：语法表达问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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