一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2023年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二作文模板教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2023年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2023年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2023年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depicts the healthy level of Chinese residents from 2012 to 2021. In 2012, the percentage of people"s health was 8.8%, but by 2021, this rate has gradually risen to 11.58%. In contrast, the proportion of people’s health experienced a significant increase of 13.82% from 2016 to 2021

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized

as follows. To start with, with the high-quality and rapid development of society, significant changes have occurred in various sectors, the younger generation, notably those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to doing physical exercises and have become a huge group. In addition, as we all know, the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted all aspects of our lives, significantly alftering people"s behaviors and choices. Therefore, an increasing number of people have started paying more attention to health Considering these factors, the depited phenomenon is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of people who care about health will likely continue to increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：加literacy

批改：加literacy

原文：The line chart clearly depicts the healthy level of Chinese residents from 2012 to 2021. In 2012, the percentage of people"s health was 8.8%, but by 2021, this rate has gradually risen to 11.58%. In contrast, the proportion of people’s health experienced a significant increase of 13.82% from 2016 to 2021

批改：能够完整地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯。

原文：,

批改：句号断句

原文：the

批改：首字母大写

批改：句号断句

原文：depited

批改：depicted

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, with the high-quality and rapid development of society, significant changes have occurred in various sectors, the younger generation, notably those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to doing physical exercises and have become a huge group. In addition, as we all know, the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted all aspects of our lives, significantly alftering people"s behaviors and choices. Therefore, an increasing number of people have started paying more attention to health Considering these factors, the depited phenomenon is unsurprising.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the number of people who care about health will likely continue to increase in the following decades.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意正确使用标点断句；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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