启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2016年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二真题备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of traveling purposes of students at a certain university. Enjoying the scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving stress at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making friends, developing independence, and other purposes are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6%, and 15%,respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound eco system, which made university students to experience the beautiful nature throu. In addition, In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, university students" ways of relieving stress have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of them choose enjoy the scenery.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of traveling purposes of students at a certain university. Enjoying the scenery takes the lead at 37%, followed by relieving stress at 33%. Additionally, factors such as making friends, developing independence, and other purposes are also considered, accounting for 9%, 6%, and 15%,respectively.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：eco system,

批改：ecosystem是一个单词

原文：throu

批改：多余删去

原文：In

批改：逗号后单词小写

原文：e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound eco system, which made university students to experience the beautiful nature throu. In addition, In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, university students" ways of relieving stress have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasing number of them choose enjoy the scenery.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，注意单词ecosystem的拼写；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，注意逗号后的单词首字母小写；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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