据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2011年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there are two tourists, sitting on a boat, enjoying the scenery and throwing garbage into the water, which pollutes the river. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environmenta! pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but wo of them are particulaly

significant. First and foremost, Environmental pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image. What is more, Tragically, although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of happiness, have disregarded the importance of protecting the environment.

How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including issuing related laws and strengthening the guiding role of the media in public opinion. But would these measures be comprehensive enough? In reality, we also need to foster the virtue of protecting the environment deliberately. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：environmenta!

批改：environmental

原文：particulaly

批改：正确拼写是particularly，另外这里不用换行

原文：wo

批改：two

原文：Environmental

批改：小写

原文：Tragically

批改：小写

原文：phenomenon

批改：后面要加逗号

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there are two tourists, sitting on a boat, enjoying the scenery and throwing garbage into the water, which pollutes the river. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that environmenta! pollution is an issue that requires great attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：描绘漫画内容，表达个人观点，注意单词拼写

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but wo of them are particulaly significant. First and foremost, Environmental pollution is like a heavy chain that hinders our nation"s progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain healthy and rapid growth, but also significantly affecting its international image. What is more, Tragically, although the lack of clear rules and regulations might contribute to this phenomenon its root cause lies in the fact that some individuals, in their pursuit of happiness, have disregarded the importance of protecting the environment.

批改：从国家和个人两方面论证了环境保护的重要性，内容切题，注意大小写和标点

原文：How can we put an end to the problem of environmental pollution? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including issuing related laws and strengthening the guiding role of the media in public opinion. But would these measures be comprehensive enough? In reality, we also need to foster the virtue of protecting the environment deliberately. With the support of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its core.

批改：呼吁解决环境污染的问题，表达通顺

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16/20

题目要求：对漫画内容描绘全面，个人观点及论述内容符合题意；

语言表达：本篇与范文高度相似，但也存在一些拼写和大小写问题。练习阶段建议用自己的语言表达，语法水平提升后再套用模板效果更好；

行文逻辑：第一段描述漫画内容并表达个人观点，第二段展开论述，第三段呼应论点，整体架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；继续多多积累经典句式；提高拼写的准确性；

这篇完成得比较好，继续加油~

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语写作模板写作提分的可靠方案。