启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2024年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon,there is a boy，stanging in the parkss and aying that new build parks near my home is very good.Simultaneously,in the right-hand chart，In 2020，the number of parks in a certain city was 406 ，but by 2022，this figure had substantially risen to 670.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,as we all know,the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choices.Consequently,an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health.In addition,as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes,our government has made tremendous efforts to build many parks,enabling residents to relax and exercise freely.Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon is unsurprising.

What about future trends?I am confident that the number of exercisers and parks is a clear sign of social improvement andwill steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：stanging

批改：standing

原文：parkss

批改：park

原文：aying

批改：saying

原文：new build

批改：newly-built

原文：parks

批改：单数

原文：new build parks near my home is very good.

批改：说的话加双引号

原文：In the left-hand cartoon,there is a boy，stanging in the parkss and aying that new build parks near my home is very good.Simultaneously,in the right-hand chart，In 2020，the number of parks in a certain city was 406 ，but by 2022，this figure had substantially risen to 670.

批改：对图画中的细节描述的很全面，但是要避免小的语言问题。

原文：e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,as we all know,the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choices.Consequently,an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health.In addition,as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes,our government has made tremendous efforts to build many parks,enabling residents to relax and exercise freely.Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon is unsurprising.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：t future trends?I am confident that the number of exercisers and parks is a clear sign of social improvement andwill steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：能对未来趋势进行预测与分析，与作文主题相符。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，语法基础较好。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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