据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2013年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语一2013年大作文题目

考研英语一2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly, 2) interpret its intended meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2013年大作文批改例文

This is simple but enlightening cartoon. There are many graduateds, standing a road of life and facing four different choices, including to seek job, take part in the postgraduate entrance examination going abroad and starting a business. Finally, several Chinese characters can be noticed below the picture which say" Choice."

This phnomenon is particularly worth attention. On the one hand, in modern society full of chances, challenges and changes, choosing a path that suit us and keep going it is a key, help us face the uncertainty of the future. On the other hand, blindly following other is like a heavy chain that hinders children’s progress. Typical example is me, I chose to take the postgradute entrance examination to improve myself.

In brief, choosing a suitable path is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop individu potential, fulfill our aspirations, and create a happier life.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：graduateds

批改：graduates

批改：加at

原文： to seek

批改：including是介词，后加seeking

原文：take

批改：taking

批改：加逗号

原文：This is simple but enlightening cartoon. There are many graduateds, standing a road of life and facing four different choices, including to seek job, take part in the postgraduate entrance examination going abroad and starting a business. Finally, several Chinese characters can be noticed below the picture which say" Choice."

批改：对图画中的细节描述的很全面，但是要避免小的语言问题。

原文：suit

批改：前面的path是单数，改成suits单三

原文：keep

批改：改成keeping，和前面的choosing保持一致

原文： it

批改：去掉

原文：help

批改：改成非谓语helping

原文：other

批改：others是名词

原文：This phnomenon is particularly worth attention. On the one hand, in modern society full of chances, challenges and changes, choosing a path that suit us and keep going it is a key, help us face the uncertainty of the future. On the other hand, blindly following other is like a heavy chain that hinders children’s progress. Typical example is me, I chose to take the postgradute entrance examination to improve myself.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：individu

批改：individual

原文：In brief, choosing a suitable path is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop individu potential, fulfill our aspirations, and create a happier life.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误，注意including是介词，后加动词ing形式；语法方面，注意主谓一致问题以及谓语和非谓语的正确使用。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语写作模板写作提分的可靠方案。