启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2011年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown in the picture, some tourists on a boat are throwing rubbish into the river casually. Plastic bottles and food bags float on the water, making the once clean river dirty. This reflects the bad behavior of some travelers who lack environmental awareness.

Such actions are harmful. They destroy the natural beauty of scenic spots and pollute the water, which is bad for aquatic life. What’s more, they set a bad example for others.

To solve this problem, we need to do our part. First, we should raise people’s environmental awareness. Second, scenic spots should add more trash cans and

strengthen management. Let’s stop

littering and keep our travel places

beautiful.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：in the picture, some tourists on a boat are throwing rubbish into the river casually. Plastic bottles and food bags float on the water, making the once clean river dirty. This reflects the bad behavior of some travelers who lack environmental awareness.

批改：对图画内容描述的很全面，且能够清晰点明主题。

原文：stroy the natural beauty of scenic spots and pollute the water, which is bad for aquatic life. What’s more, they set a bad example for others. To solve this problem, we need to do our part. First, we should raise people’s environmental awareness. Second, scenic spots should add more trash cans and strengthen management. Let’s stop littering and keep our travel places beautiful.

批改：该段能够针对图画现象提出自己的解决措施，运用逻辑关系词使得句与句之间衔接较为紧密。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，基础词汇掌握较好；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，语法基础还不错。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬，但是字数有些不足作文的要求，建议增加一些内容。继续加油。

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