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一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

Elaborately and luminously, this table arranges the population of Chinese in city and village in an orderly manner, displaying that urban populations are increasing and the rural populations are decreasing.

I intend to make some further analysis as follows. During these two decades, the population in rural areas dropped sharply, from the peak of 834 million to 674 million. By contrast, the number of city residents showed a remarkable increase, from 300 million to 666 million. Several factors could weigh heavily for the upsurge of urban population, yet suspended at the top of the list are following two aspects 。To begin with, towns have more employment opportunities to attract people. Apart from that, compared with rural areas, urban areas have more perfect facilities and more convenient transportation.

Considering these general illustrations, we may reasonably arrive at a conclusion that China"s urbanization level is further developing. The tendency that the urbanization will continuously play a critical role in our daily life may be irreversible.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Elaborately and luminously,

批改：用词冗余且不贴合图表描述场景

原文：population of Chinese in city and village

批改：表达不规范（应为 “urban and rural populations in China”）

原文：are increasing and the rural populations are decreasing

批改：时态错误（描述过去 20 年的变化，应为 “were on the rise/were in decline”）

原文：Elaborately and luminously, this table arranges the population of Chinese in city and village in an orderly manner, displaying that urban populations are increasing and the rural populations are decreasing.

批改：描写图表内容，符合题目要求，可以将第二段的数据挪到第一段

原文：city residents

批改：城市居民一般表示为“urban population”

原文：weigh heavily for

批改：搭配错误（应为 “contribute to”）

原文：uspended at the top of the list are following two aspects 。

批改：表达生硬且语法错误（应为 “the following two factors stand out”）

原文：towns

批改：应为 “cities”

原文：more perfect

批改：搭配不当（“perfect” 无比较级，应为 “more complete and high-quality public facilities”）

原文：general illustrations

批改： 用词不当（应为 “analyses”）

原文：is further developing

批改：表达不自然（应为 “has been further elevated”）

原文：I intend to make some further analysis as follows. During these two decades, the population in rural areas dropped sharply, from the peak of 834 million to 674 million. By contrast, the number of city residents showed a remarkable increase, from 300 million to 666 million. Several factors could weigh heavily for the upsurge of urban population, yet suspended at the top of the list are following two aspects 。To begin with, towns have more employment opportunities to attract people. Apart from that, compared with rural areas, urban areas have more perfect facilities and more convenient transportation.

批改：相关论述内容较少，观点不清晰

原文：Considering these general illustrations, we may reasonably arrive at a conclusion that China"s urbanization level is further developing. The tendency that the urbanization will continuously play a critical role in our daily life may be irreversible.

批改：结尾段符合内容和结构的要求

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8

这篇图表分析文核心清晰，能准确捕捉 “城乡人口此消彼长” 的核心趋势。但存在较多问题：一是用词不当、搭配错误频发（如 “more perfect”“weigh heavily for”），部分表达生硬冗余；二是整体框架，第一段描写图表内容结合详细数据，第二段论述原因，不要杂糅在一起；论述部分较少，只有两句话，无法表达自己的观点；三是语法细节不规范（时态、标点错误）。参考范文的逻辑，希望继续努力，加油！

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