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一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the cars selling of our country in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese cars was 25%, but by 2009, the rate had substantially risen to around 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese cars will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars will likely continue to decrease relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the cars selling of

批改：重点描述的是变化，改为 the changes in market shares of certain brands in

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：语法正确

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

批改：语法正确

原文： relatively stable

批改：删去，此处动词后面不能再加形容词短语，形容词不能修饰动词

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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