考研英语一写作技巧每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2016年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

The picture made everyone sink in thought. As is clearly portrayed in the picture, instead of just making demands, it"s better to set a good example. We were informed that the importance should be attached to example.

Undoubtedly, the picture is sending us the message that example is critical to personal development. To begin with, example has the power to make us move forward, take risks, and make the most of opportunities. Life is full of challenges. Sometimes the challenges may become problems that can spiral us into despair and frustration. Example allow us to turn challenges into opportunities. what"s more, example give us the strength to chase after things that are important to us. It helps us to take action in a way that is consistent with our values.

On the whole, it is important to recognize that it takes time and effort to build example. It is very unlikely that we will have example overnight. Instead, we will probably find that we make small improvements over a period of time.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：in

批改：into

原文：We were informed that the importance should be attached to example

批改：有些生硬 改为We should attach importance to setting a good example会好些

原文：Example allow

批改：Setting a good example allows

原文：example give

批改：setting a good example gives

原文：what"s

批改：What"s

原文：build example

批改：cultivate the awareness of setting a good example

原文：On the whole, it is important to recognize that it takes time and effort to build example. It is very unlikely that we will have example overnight. Instead, we will probably find that we make small improvements over a period of time

批改：这段话有些与题目要求分离了。 树立榜样需要时间，题目说是榜样的重要性。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

1.题目要求：字数符合题目要求。文章需要分析图画并表明观点，符合题目要求。

2.语言表达：语言表达清晰。个别地方在语法运用和表达上还有提升空间。

3.内容层面：基本包含题目要求的内容。但是最后一段内容可以适当修改。

4.修改意见：文章整体较完整，结构较为清晰，按照描述漫画、阐述哲理和提出呼吁的顺序进行写作。建议考生不要硬套模板，而是要根据实际情况灵活运用模板。

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