一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2023年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2023年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2023年大作文48. Directions: Write an essay based on the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe and interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. Write your answer in about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2023年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depicts national people health literacy level. In 2012, the percentage of health literacy level was 8.8%, but 2021, this rate had substantially risen to 25.40% The proportion of health literacy experienced a significart increuse of 16.60% from 2012 to 2021.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon conbe summarized as follows. To start with, as we all know, the outbroak of COVCD-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behavios and choices. Consequently, an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health. In acdition. In the woke of the high-speed advancement of society. People"s attitudes towards of health literacy have underyone significant changes. This explains why an iscincrecting number of people choose health lifestycle. Considering these facters, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsuprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of health literacy will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：national people health literacy level.

批改： health literacy level of Chinese residents

批改：加by

原文：increuse

批改：increase

原文：significart

批改：significant

原文：The line chart clearly depicts national people health literacy level. In 2012, the percentage of health literacy level was 8.8%, but 2021, this rate had substantially risen to 25.40% The proportion of health literacy experienced a significart increuse of 16.60% from 2012 to 2021.

批改：在描述图表信息时要注意语言的准确性。

原文：conbe

批改：can be

原文：outbroak

批改：outbreak

原文：COVCD

批改：COVID

原文：behavios

批改：behaviors

原文：acdition

批改：addition后加逗号

原文：woke

批改：wake

批改：逗号

原文：of

批改：去掉

原文：underyone

批改：undergone

原文：iscincrecting

批改：increasing

原文：health lifestycle.

批改：healthy lifestyle

原文：unsuprising

批改：unsurprising

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon conbe summarized as follows. To start with, as we all know, the outbroak of COVCD-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behavios and choices. Consequently, an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health. In acdition. In the woke of the high-speed advancement of society. People"s attitudes towards of health literacy have underyone significant changes. This explains why an iscincrecting number of people choose health lifestycle. Considering these facters, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsuprising.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词对图表中的现象进行分析论述，注意避免小的语言问题。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of health literacy will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意正确使用标点；语法方面，总体来看语法基础较好。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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