启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart dearly depicts some brond in interior car morket proportion. In 2008, the opercentage of Chinese brand was percent twenty-five, but by 2009. this rate had substantially risen to thirty-two. In contrust, the proportion of Japanese brand decline of eight percent during the same period, Simultaneously, the number of American band remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the obsened phenomenon can be summoried as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those bor in the 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic car bands and have become the primary consumer goup. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the signi ficant progress made by China"s manufacturing inclustry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the table is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the propotion of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast the proportion of Amerian brand will likely continue to remain rrelatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：dearly

批改：dearly 拼写错误，应为 clearly。

原文：me brond in

批改：brond 拼写错误，应为 brands

原文：t proportion. In 2008, the opercentage of Chinese brand was percent twenty-

批改：morket 拼写错误，应为 market。 opercentage 拼写错误，应为 percentage。

原文： thirty-two. In con

批改：percent twenty-five 和 thirty-two：在图表作文中，数据应使用阿拉伯数字 25% 和 32%，这样更清晰、正式。

原文： In contrust,

批改：In contrust 拼写错误，应为 In contrast。

原文：ortion of Japanese

批改：the proportion of Japanese brand decline of eight percent：此句缺少谓语动词，且结构错误。应改为 the proportion of Japanese brands declined by 8% 或 ...experienced a decline of 8%。

原文： number of Americ

批改：American band 拼写错误，应为 American brands。

原文： line chart dearly depicts some brond in interior car morket proportion. In 2008, the opercentage of Chinese brand was percent twenty-five, but by 2009. this rate had substantially risen to thirty-two. In contrust, the proportion of Japanese brand decline of eight percent during the same period, Simultaneously, the number of American band remained stable and stead

批改：你准确地描述了三类品牌的核心变化趋势，内容要点是完整的。但是，本段出现了较多的拼写错误和一个关键的句子结构错误，这严重影响了阅卷老师对内容的理解和对你语言能力的评判。图表描述段是门面，准确性和规范性是第一位的。

原文：e obsened phenomenon can be summoried as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s ra

批改：obsened 拼写错误，应为 observed。 summoried 拼写错误，应为 summarized。 bor 拼写错误，应为 born。

原文：c car bands

批改：car bands 拼写错误，应为 car brands。 goup 拼写错误，应为 group。

原文： signi ficant progress made by China"s manufacturing inclustry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the table is unsurprising.

批改：signi ficant 拼写错误，应为 significant。 inclustry 拼写错误，应为 industry。 in the table：图表是柱状图或线状图，不是表格 (table)，用词不准确。

原文：The core reasons for the obsened phenomenon can be summoried as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those bor in the 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic car bands and have become the primary consumer goup. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the signi ficant progress made by China"s manufacturing inclustry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the table is unsurprising

批改：本段的论证角度非常出色！你从“年轻一代成为消费主力”和“中国制造业进步”两个层面来分析，第一个原因尤其新颖且具有时代感，是很大的亮点。然而，密集的拼写错误再一次拖累了你的分数，使得原本出色的论点被大打折扣。

原文：the propotion of Chinese brand

批改：propotion 拼写错误，应为 proportion。 Amerian 拼写错误，应为 American。

原文：relatively stable.

批改：rrelatively 拼写错误，应为 relatively。 In contrast 后缺少逗号，应为 In contrast,

原文：t about future trends? I am confident that the propotion of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast the proportion of Amerian brand will likely continue to remain rrelatively stab

批改：你对未来趋势做出了清晰合理的预测，很好地完成了段落任务。但依然存在的拼写错误非常可惜。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9分

你这篇作文的内容和逻辑其实相当不错，尤其是第二段的原因分析，角度很好。但是，频繁且基础的拼写错误已经成为你冲击高分的最大障碍。

你的问题非常明确

给你的核心提升建议：

当前首要任务：攻克拼写。建立个人高频拼错词库。将你在这几篇作文中反复拼错的词（如brand, market, percentage, proportion, observed, industry等）全部列出来，每天花15-20分钟反复背诵和默写。

实施“检查法”：在完成作文后，强制自己留出至少5分钟，不做任何修改，只做一件事：逐词逐句地检查拼写。想象自己是一个校对员，目标就是找出并消灭所有拼写错误。

巩固句子结构：同时，巩固简单句的五种基本句型，确保写出的每一个句子结构都是完整的。

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