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一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic cars was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese cars experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American cars remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic cars rather than imported cars and become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s automotive industry in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic cars is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American cars will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

原文：industry

批改：加句号，此处为第二个原因

原文： in the chart

批改：此处要表达完整，改为 Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart

批改：内容表达不错，也很具体

批改：语法正确

批改：结尾段表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在一处表达问题，没有写完，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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