启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2016年考研英语二大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the purpose of traveling by the students in college. Enjoy the sightseeing takes the lead at. 37%, followed by release the stress at 33% Additionally, factors such as increasing the ability of doing things by oneself, mak ing friends and others reasons are also considered, accounting for 6% 9% and 15% respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can by summarized as follows. To start with, In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society students are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual This explains why an increase number of student. choose to go for a trip rather than stay at college. In addition. as the saying goes. "On lifes stage, pressure is always present. "Nowadays university students are compelled to comfront immense academic pressure and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time

What about future trends) Iam confident that above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of students. serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the follow decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Enjoy

批改：动名词做主语，改成Enjoying

原文：release

批改：介词后加动词ing形式，releasing

原文：others reasons

批改：other purposes

原文：The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the purpose of traveling by the students in college. Enjoy the sightseeing takes the lead at. 37%, followed by release the stress at 33% Additionally, factors such as increasing the ability of doing things by oneself, mak ing friends and others reasons are also considered, accounting for 6% 9% and 15% respectively.

批改：在描述图表信息时要注意语言的准确性。

原文：by

批改：be

原文：In

批改：逗号后单词小写

批改：加逗号断句

原文：spiritual

批改：后加fulfillment

原文：increase

批改：increasing

原文：student

批改：复数

批改：逗号

批改：逗号

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can by summarized as follows. To start with, In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society students are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual This explains why an increase number of student. choose to go for a trip rather than stay at college. In addition. as the saying goes. "On lifes stage, pressure is always present. "Nowadays university students are compelled to comfront immense academic pressure and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词对图表中的现象进行分析论述，注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：)

批改：问号

批改：逗号

原文：What about future trends) Iam confident that above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of students. serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the follow decades.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，名词单复数要使用正确；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但还要注意正确使用标点断句；语法方面，注意动名词做主语以及介词后加动词ing形式。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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