一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2015年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二作文真题教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文： ple chart clearly displays the percentage breakdowm

批改：ple chart -> Pie chart (核心词汇拼写错误) breakdowm -> breakdown (拼写错误)

原文：spense in a chinese city during spring festival.

批改：spense -> spending (拼写错误) chinese -> Chinese (专有名词需大写) spring festival -> the Spring Festival (节日名称需大写，并加定冠词)

原文： takes the lead at 40% followed by traffic cost at 20%. Addidonlly, factors such as party cost and other are

批改：takes -> take (主谓一致错误，"gifts"为复数) Addidonlly -> Additionally (拼写错误) party cost -> dining gatherings (用词不正式) as same as traffic cose -> the same as transportation costs (表达和拼写错误)

原文： s opon S3 s b

批改：s opon S3 s blw ueved：此部分为无法识别的乱码，需要删除。

原文：ple chart clearly displays the percentage breakdowm of spense in a chinese city during spring festival. New year gifts takes the lead at 40% followed by traffic cost at 20%. Addidonlly, factors such as party cost and other are also considered accounting for 20% as same as traffic cose, s opon S3 s blw

批改：本段基本描述了图表数据，但存在大量基础词汇的拼写错误和一个主谓一致语法错误

原文： cove reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows NuPer uc To star

批改：cove -> core (拼写错误) NuPer uc / cked ant / yve / ap：均为乱码，需要删除。

原文：rchasing power s of the populace. allowing them to afford automobies that were previously deemed cked ant luxury items. In addition, againse the background of our country"s vapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those bown in the 1990s and

批改：purchasing power s -> purchasing power (多余字符) automobies -> automobiles (拼写错误) againse -> against (拼写错误) vapid -> rapid (拼写错误，且“vapid”意为“无趣的”，与语境不符) bown -> born (拼写错误)

原文： accustomed

批改：a accustomed -> are accustomed (缺少be动词)

原文：c To start with, as a pioneer of changes, our government has made countless efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power s of the populace. allowing them to afford automobies that were previously deemed cked ant luxury items. In addition, againse the background of our country"s vapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those bown in the 1990s and 2000s, a accustomed to exchange gifts and have yve become the primary consumer group. ap

批改：将“交通花费(Traffic cost)”解释为“购买汽车(afford automobiles)”是严重的逻辑偏差。图表中的“交通”更可能指春节期间探亲访友的“出行费用”(travel expenses)，如机票、火车票，而非购买私家车。

原文：e countless efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power s of the populace. allowing them to afford automobies that were previously deemed cked ant luxury items. In addition, againse the background of our country"s vapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those bown in the 1990s and 2000s, a accustomed to exchange gifts and have yve become the primary consumer group. a

批改：段的分析脱离了图表数据的本意。第一个原因（购买汽车）与图表信息不符。第二个原因（年轻一代成为消费主力）是合理的观点，但被大量的拼写错误和乱码所拖累，且分析不够深入。

原文：he future trands? I am confident that the above figers accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of younger and will likely remain relatively seable in the following decades,( bose is coig

批改：trands -> trends (拼写错误) figers -> figures (拼写错误) the choices of younger -> the choices of the younger generation (成分残缺) seable -> stable (拼写错误)

原文：hat"s the future trands? I am confident that the above figers accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of younger and will likely remain relatively seable in the following decades,( bose is co

批改：结尾段的结构是清晰的，对未来趋势做出了预测。但同样受到了拼写错误和用词不完整的影响

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：6分

根据评分标准，这篇作文未能按要求完成试题规定的任务。

内容要点： 未能有效阐述内容要点，对“交通花费”的分析与图表可能传递的信息无关，属于未能有效阐述。

语法与词汇： 语法结构单调，词汇有限，且有大量拼写错误，严重影响理解。

连贯与衔接： 乱码和错误导致内容连贯性被破坏。

总评与修改建议：

同学，我能看到你尝试在作文中运用一些复杂句式和高级词汇（如 "pioneer of changes", "dynamic development"），这证明你有提升写作水平的意愿，非常棒！但现在，我们需要先集中精力解决两个最基础也最关键的问题：

消灭拼写错误。当前，大量的拼写错误和乱码是阻碍你得分的主要障碍。请在完成作文后，务必留出3-5分钟时间专门检查拼写，重点关注像 "Pie chart", "Spring Festival", "spending", "transportation" 这类核心词汇。一个干净、准确的卷面能立刻提升你的分数档次。

让分析落地。在分析原因时，一定要问自己：“我的解释是否直接对应图表中的文字和数据？”比如，看到“交通花费(transportation)”，应该直接联想到“回家团圆(traveling back home for reunion)”或“节日出行(holiday trips)”，而不是跳到“购买汽车”上。让每一个分析都紧紧扣住题目给出的信息。

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