一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2013年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二写作冲刺教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

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Section IV Writing Part B

48. The bar chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of students in part-time job from one senior high school. senior students takes the lead at 88.24%, followed by junior students at 71.93%. Additionally, factors such as freshman and sophomore are also considered, accounting for 67.77% and 71.13%

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summaried as follows. To start with, as the saying goes, “On life"s stage, pressure is always present. "Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense economic pressue, and as a result, taking part-time jobs has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time In addition. I an increasing number of young people believe that experience in mordern society full of changes, challenges and chances, is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. The experience in part-time jobs let them woke in the future more fluent.

What about future trends? I am confident about the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of students in high school, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：one senior high schoo

批改：at a certain university.

原文：senior students

批改：The percentage of senior students taking part-time jobs

原文：ctors such as freshman and sophomore are also considered,

批改：这个模板句子套的不好哦，大一学生和大二学生不是因素，也不是被不被考虑的。改为the percentage of sophomore students taking part-time jobs is 67.77%，and the percentage of sophomore students taking part-time jobs is 71.13%.

原文：he percentage breakdown of students in part-time job from one senior high school. senior students takes the lead at 88.24%, followed by junior students at 71.93%. Additionally, factors such as freshman and sophomore are also considered, accounting for 67.77% and 71.13

批改：数据比较清晰，但是句子结构，句子表述不是很好哦，一定要表述完整，关键词一定要到位哦

原文：marie

批改：summarized

原文：ime

批改：后加句号

批改：逗号

原文：I

批改：删掉

原文：ence

批改：work experience更好

原文：t

批改：lets

原文：ok

批改：become

原文：in the future more fluent

批改：in the future放在fluent后面

原文：ns for the observed phenomenon can be summaried as follows. To start with, as the saying goes, “On life"s stage, pressure is always present. "Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense economic pressue, and as a result, taking part-time jobs has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time In addition. I an increasing number of young people believe that experience in mordern society full of changes, challenges and chances, is indispensable if they wish to achieve success in the long run. The experience in part-time jobs let them woke in the future more flu

批改：句子结构和内容比较到位，但是错误也不少，注意语法错误和词汇错误，表述问题。

原文：bo

批改：that

原文：h school,

批改：the university

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15

语法：语法上注意标点，大小写，句子成分不能丢，每写一句都要看看语法对不对，词汇有没有写错的哦，还有that写成about的，错误一定要注意修改。

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的，第二段很通顺。

词汇：单词整体还行，但是写错了单词哦，注意一些词汇使用的适当性哦。

内容：内容比较符合英文作文写作要求，结构合理。

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