启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2014年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二作文范文备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

What a vivid column chart it is! The chart exhibits a far-reaching phenomenon. In 1990, the population of urban was only about three million,comparing with the countryside, which is far behind. Time flys,in 2000, the gap of population has narrowed, the urban population occupied over half in ratio. In 2010,the population gap vanished.

This chart serves to remind us of the majestic achievement of the urbanization. The advantage of urbanization is providing excellent fundamental construction which contains medical supplyment,convenient transportation and multiple foods.

First and foremost,the Reform and Opening up policy plays a significant role in it which absorbs a huge amount of fund from oversea and offers multiple careers to the society. The residents" money boosted. Furthermore, under the leadership of Chinese Communist Party, our authority ultilizes their wisdom to arrange various factories in the countryside and make their every effort to construct the high-speed railways which connect the whole country to quicken the urbanization. In the end , the compulsory education help the people learn more and use their knowledge to build their homeland.

To put all into a nutshell, I fully admire the achievement of the urbanization, it encourages me to study and construct our motherland.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：population of urban

批改：urban是形容词，乡村人口应改为urban population

原文：three

批改：按图表内容应该是three hundred

原文：comparing

批改：这里要用被动式compared

原文：flys

批改：flies

原文：has

批改：在2000年，应该用过去完成时had

原文：the

批改：这里是两个句子，前面要加连词and

原文：in ratio

批改：多余，应删除

原文：What a vivid column chart it is! The chart exhibits a far-reaching phenomenon. In 1990, the population of urban was only about three million,comparing with the countryside, which is far behind. Time flys,in 2000, the gap of population has narrowed, the urban population occupied over half in ratio. In 2010,the population gap vanished.

批改：对图表内容描述不太准确，另外要注意语法问题

原文：the

批改：urbanization是不可数抽象名词，不用加定冠词

原文：supplyment

批改：supplies表示物资

原文：oversea

批改：overseas

原文：which

批改：指代不明，应改为because it，表明因果关系

原文：ultilizes

批改：utilizes

原文：their

批改：多余，应删除

原文：help

批改：主语是单数，这里要用helps

原文：is chart serves to remind us of the majestic achievement of the urbanization. The advantage of urbanization is providing excellent fundamental construction which contains medical supplyment,convenient transportation and multiple foods. First and foremost,the Reform and Opening up policy plays a significant role in it which absorbs a huge amount of fund from oversea and offers multiple careers to the society. The residents" money boosted. Furthermore, under the leadership of Chinese Communist Party, our authority ultilizes their wisdom to arrange various factories in the countryside and make their every effort to construct the high-speed railways which connect the whole country to quicken the urbanization. In the end , the compulsory education help the people learn more and use their knowledge to build their homeland.

批改：论证部分内容较多，而且衔接语也不是从开头就有的，建议删除This chart serves... and multiple foods这部分

原文：it

批改：这里是两句，前面要加连词and

原文：To put all into a nutshell, I fully admire the achievement of the urbanization, it encourages me to study and construct our motherland.

批改：表达个人观点，注意连词的使用

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：7

题目要求：描述图表内容时要注意关键数字，个人观点及论述内容切题，但论述内容较多，建议精简一下；

语言表达：全文存在较多语法问题和一些拼写错误，导致内容表达上不够流畅清晰；

行文逻辑：第一段描述题干内容，第二段给出详细论述，第三段表达个人观点，架构完整；

修改建议：改正原文错误；优化论述内容；提升语法水平；多多积累经典句式；加强写作练习；

同学还有进步的空间，期待下一篇更好~

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