据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2014年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts that the different change situation of urban population and countryside population in china from 1990 to 2010. In 1990, the number of urban population was approximately 300 million，but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to around 666 million. In contrast the number of countryside population experienced a slow decline of 160 million from 1990 to 2010.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound economic system, enabling countryside residents to have ample opportunities to enter cities for further economic development. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to living in cities and prefer modern urban lifestyle. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban population is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of countryside populationwill likely continue to decreas.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：depicts that the different ch

批改：表达不地道：the different change situation 是典型的中式英语，非常冗长。地道的表达是 the changes in the urban and rural populations。同时，countryside population 应改为更标准的 rural population。

原文：in china

批改：拼写错误：国家名 China 首字母必须大写。

原文： bar chart clearly depicts that the different change situation of urban population and countryside population in china from 1990 to 2010. In 1990, the number of urban population was approximately 300 million，but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to around 666 million. In contrast the number of countryside population experienced a slow decline of 160 million from 1990 to 2010.

批改：本段准确地抓住了核心数据，趋势描述清晰。主要问题在于用词不够地道和专业，使得表达显得生硬。通过使用更标准的术语和简洁的表达

原文： prefer modern urban lifestyle. Considering these factors, t

批改：语法错误：prefer 是及物动词，后面应直接接名词，或使用 prefer to do结构。这里应为 prefer the modern urban lifestyle。

原文：ore reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound economic system, enabling countryside residents to have ample opportunities to enter cities for further economic development. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to living in cities and prefer modern urban lifestyle. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：本段的论证角度选择得非常出色，从政府驱动的经济机会和年轻一代的生活方式偏好两方面分析，非常切题

原文：e populationwill likely continu

批改：populationwill 应分开为 population will。decreas 拼写错误，应为 decrease。

原文：l improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of countryside populationwill likely continue to decreas.

批改：本段的趋势预测本身是合理的。但论证逻辑存在偏差，且出现了不该有的拼写错误

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分

总体修改建议

追求地道表达：多积累和模仿英语本族语者的常用搭配，避免直译中文思维。例如，学会使用 changes in...population 这类简洁的表达。

保持客观严谨：在分析型写作中让语言为清晰论证服务。同时，结论避免非黑即白的价值判断。

仔细检查与修改：完成初稿后，务必留出时间通读检查，重点排查拼写、标点和基本的语法错误。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语写作模板写作提分的可靠方案。