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一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in market shares of certain brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008,the percentage of Japanses brand was 25%,but by 2009, this rate had substantially decreased to 25%. In contrast,the proportion of national brand experienced a significant increase of 5% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of a brand of America remained stable and steady

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation.In my view the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s monufacturing--industry in responding to these changes. In addition,Against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development the younger generation,particularly those born in the 1990s ond 2000s,are accustomed to using domestic brand and have become the primary consumer group.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends ? I am confident that the proportion of national brand of cay will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast,the proportion of Japanses brand of car. will. likely continue to decrease relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：语法正确

原文： brand

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为复数 brands

原文：25%

批改：此处为 35%

原文：national brand

批改：改为 domestic brands

原文：5%

批改：此处为7%

原文：a brand of America

批改：改为 American brands

原文：steady

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容，注意数字表达的准确性

批改：语法正确

原文：view

批改：加逗号

原文：monufacturing

批改：manufacturing

原文：Against

批改：此处首字母不大写

原文：evelopment

批改：加逗号

原文：brand

批改：此处为复数，且使用的是 cars, 不是品牌，改为 cars

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文：national brand of cay

批改：改为 domestic cars

原文： brand of car

批改：改为 cars

原文： relatively stable

批改：形容词短语不能修饰动词，删去

批改：删去

批改：删去

批改：结尾段内容表达不错，多注意语法问题

原文：--

批改：删去

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心 3. 标点使用和首字母大小写要规范，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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