据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2016年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purposes of travelling among students at a certain university.Enjoying the view takes the lead at 37%,follow by relieving stress at 33%.Additionally,factors such as making friends extensively,developing independent abilities,and so on are considered,accounting for 9%,6%,and 15%,respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,university students are no longer content mere material satisfaction;they also pursue spiritual enjoyment.This explain why an increasing number of university students regard travelling as an important activity. In addition,as the saying goes,”On life’s stage,pressure is always present.”Nowadays,university students are compelled to confront immerse academic pressure,and as a result,travelling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends?I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：follow by

批改：“followed by”（被动语态，表 “紧随其后”）

原文：explain

批改：“explain” 需改为 “explains”（主语 “this” 为单数）

原文：immerse

批改：“immerse” 是动词，应改为形容词 “immense”（“巨大的”）

原文：The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purposes of travelling among students at a certain university.Enjoying the view takes the lead at 37%,follow by relieving stress at 33%.Additionally,factors such as making friends extensively,developing independent abilities,and so on are considered,accounting for 9%,6%,and 15%,respectively.

批改：描述图表内容，符合题目要求

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,university students are no longer content mere material satisfaction;they also pursue spiritual enjoyment.This explain why an increasing number of university students regard travelling as an important activity. In addition,as the saying goes,”On life’s stage,pressure is always present.”Nowadays,university students are compelled to confront immerse academic pressure,and as a result,travelling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：给出了自己的分析，条理清晰

原文：What about future trends?I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

批改：对未来表示预测，内容结构完整

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11

这篇图表分析文围绕 “某大学学生旅行目的占比” 展开，能清晰传递核心信息，原因分析也尝试结合社会背景与学生需求，整体逻辑可辨。但是存在个别语法问题，需要注意单词的词性以及单复数这种细节的问题，在细心一些，希望继续努力，加油！

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