启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的考研英语作文模板高分范文。本文呈现的2016年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

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Example is Better than Dilemands

In the left-hand picture, there is a man, asking his son to study and watching TV at the same time On the controy in the right-hand, a man is companying with son to study hardly Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is being examples that play an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon it thought-provoking in several rways but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, while certain Chinese traditions may be outdated. the virtue of being a sample is one that should never lose its luster, as it is an essential bond that keep shape the admirable character of the Chinese people. What s more, ignoring ourselves and improving our demands not only hindess Children"s prograss, but also acts as an Achilles" heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a steeping itone towarc hell.

In brief, being examples is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality. Only by doing o can we develop individual potential and create a happier life.

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：controy

批改：contrary

原文：hardly

批改：hardly是几乎不的意思，hard是努力地

原文：play

批改：单三plays

原文：In the left-hand picture, there is a man, asking his son to study and watching TV at the same time On the controy in the right-hand, a man is companying with son to study hardly Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is being examples that play an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：it

批改：is

原文：rways

批改：ways

批改：逗号

原文：a sample

批改：an example

原文：keep

批改：keeps

原文：shape

批改：keep doing，改成shaping

原文： s

批改：is

原文：hindess

批改：hinders

原文：prograss

批改：progress

原文：steeping

批改：stepping

原文：itone

批改：stone

原文：towarc

批改：towards

原文：This phenomenon it thought-provoking in several rways but two of them are particularly significant. First and foremost, while certain Chinese traditions may be outdated. the virtue of being a sample is one that should never lose its luster, as it is an essential bond that keep shape the admirable character of the Chinese people. What s more, ignoring ourselves and improving our demands not only hindess Children"s prograss, but also acts as an Achilles" heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a steeping itone towarc hell.

批改：论述的内容较为全面，运用逻辑关系词使得句与句之间衔接较为紧密。注意避免小的语言问题。

原文：o

批改：so

原文：In brief, being examples is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this quality. Only by doing o can we develop individual potential and create a happier life.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意从句中谓语使用正确以及一句话只能有一个谓语。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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